But his decision has devastating consequences: His convoy get caught in an explosion, and Ben ends up in a coma for two months. When he decides to enlist in the army, no one thinks he'll be in read danger. One second this kids parents are together and they you hear from another character they split.don't tell me, show me how this happens!īen lives a charmed life - effortlessly landing the lead in the high school musical, dating the prettiest girl in school. Or, if you want an overall view of everyone, you MUST make the book longer and give each character more time on the page.
If I had been their editor I would have asked whose story they wanted to tell? Then use that point of view. Most campus bars could smell a freshmen a mile away and card EVERYONE.just seemed odd that this was portrayed a typical evening out for an 18 year old.did these authors go to college when drinking age was 18? This book is not set in that time. This same girl who is supposed to be a freshmen in college is shown liberally drinking at a bar with friends during eshman are not 21 and can't go to bars. The addition of the autistic younger brother took away from the story.wasn't the story of a young man going to war and coming back brain damaged enough for 145 pages.did we really need to waste pages of text on how to write a sestina or the younger brother sleeping in a closet at a rest stop? Things that made no sense: A smart 18 year old girl meets a guy in the forest and feels the need for mace.then after only a short conversation with this stranger she gets into his car for a ride? Obviously these two male authors were never young women who had to fear for their safety in an often scary world. The authors couldn't choose which person to focus on so they tried to do a bit of everyone's point of view, not giving anyone true depth.
The story seemed way too short for all it wanted to convey. Negatives: Poor editing, missing words, words that obviously ended up in the text because a lazy editor used spell check rather than actually reading the text. I just wish it had been done better than this.
Positives: A modern story about war that needs to be told.
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